beneath my fingers,
but does not break.
I press harder,
straining the stringy
fibers, to no avail.
Adding rotation,
I twist the husk,
and fruitlessly
pull in opposite directions,
as if manipulating
a Chinese fingertrap.
But with a final
twist, and yank,
my fingers burst through,
and I feast
on my tiny prize,
amidst clouds
of brown,
pulverized,
tissue-paper
seed coating, floating
like confetti
about my head.
again, i think you are very adequately using food to express a clear mood/atmosphere, this one of strain and release.
ReplyDeleteand again, you need to lose the similes. i think your next project should be banning 'as if' and 'like' from your poems.