Friday, April 16, 2010

race

vague pronoun
of the skin
why do we always
seem
to find your undulating
referent
slipping off beneath
those amber waves

2 comments:

  1. interesting comment on race and nationalism, to me, though i don't know how else to read 'amber waves.' 'seem' getting its own line is either awkward or provoking... and i think you mean 'referent'?

    as the only image here is 'amber waves,' and you are trying to define an ambiguous concept, i would consider a different word or an objective correlative or some trope for 'referent,' might be too many juggled concepts to keep track of.

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  2. I am with Tim on this one. BUT I'm totally with you on the whole vague pronoun pizazz.

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