Sunday, April 25, 2010

These Waters

These waters rustle like the leaves.
Spring is coming -
but an acorn drops.
Quick, bury it in the sand
before someone sees.

3 comments:

  1. I'm with Nina -- these are all very compelling and well written, but I want context to make them more meaningful. Are you burying the acorn because it has dropped prematurely, and if no one notices spring can come as scheduled? Or does this have to do with squirrels and hoarding?

    Again, really interesting as standalone pieces, but there's so much there that I want...

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  2. i love this by itself... reminds me of Spike Hawkins.

    short change: i would get rid of that dash and just have two more short sentences: Spring is coming. An acorn drops.

    reminds me also of The Life of Towns by carson this way. great haikuesque poem

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