Monday, April 2, 2012

Demeter

I told her I would eat a thousand nightshades to keep from waking,
that I would take nettles, fresh and stinging,
and chew until they broke to liquid.
I said I would kiss her eggplant ring.
But she sang her morning song and released the window’s shade.
She said she would take the sleep from my eyes
and there would be no winter-spring,
no delay, only early arrival,
and I shuddered.

3 comments:

  1. I really like this... what do you think about possibly having Demeter touch the speaker, rather than just talk? It might be interesting to have the shudder be the result of a spirit trying to wipe sleep from her eyes...

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  2. Nightshades!

    I like this a lot.

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  3. really liked the part about eggplant and chewing and eating.

    I think you can lose the last 4 lines completely. that last line is so wonderful that i don't want reminded who demeter is because her name as the title is enough.

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