Monday, April 2, 2012

Disembarking

You will always think
you have enough time
to exchange one more glance
with the beauty in front of you,

until she steps off your train.

3 comments:

  1. If you don't leave a Missed Connection you are really just spitting in Fate's face.

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  2. love these short little poems, mostly because I have no facility for them at all. this was ALMOST ideal, but I think 1) the title needs changed and 2) the last line should simply be "with beauty". I think holding off more on the reveal increases the pleasurable humor and, oddly, the pathos. The combination of the two is fascinating.

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  3. I second a new title. Really love this.

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