the enjambments are off, i think. why end at 'with' unless you are planning on isolated "The Snapple Lady"? and then if that's the case, why continue on that line?
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the enjambments are off, i think. why end at 'with' unless you are planning on isolated "The Snapple Lady"? and then if that's the case, why continue on that line?
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i hope more of your poems feature product-puns.
The snapple lady is indeed the opposite of snappy. jolly has no teeth.
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