lower,
and lower
into quicksand,
the mush envelops me;
swaddling my stretched
muscles, and lifting
the weight from my soles.
In a way,
it's so relaxing,
I'd rather grab
a remote control
than a lifeline.
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might need some punctuation work (i am against that semi-colon), but this is fantastic. Perfect title, and perfect ending. Pretty good linework, but maybe make it a bit more halting? "lower, and / lower into / quicksand" perhaps?
ReplyDeletereally liked this.
"i'd rather grab a remote control than a lifeline."
ReplyDeleteTAYLOR GET OUT OF MY HEAD
the nonchalance of the tone is haunting...
ReplyDeletegreat.